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2013년 6월 2일 일요일

The 21st century has begun. What changes do youthink this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

           Since I was ten years old, I have been thinking about the twenty-first century. The twenty-first century is the most technologically advanced century that humans have ever experienced. People can use various equipment to do many projects involving both small housework and big country work. By being able to finish such works earlier, both people and the country get a lot of advantages, especially about communicating. People nowadays spend their times communicating with people all over the world. Countries also get advantage of trading or moving to other countries. So the world is getting closer in the twenty-first century because of two main reasons: the SNS and transportation.

           To begin with, people use SNS, the abbreviation of Social Network Service, to deliver anything they want. For instance, there was one accident called the Jasmine Revolution. In Tunisia there were three main problems. One was its despotic government and decomposition, other was the economic hardness and the other was its low employment rate. The main problem they faced was the first one. People in Tunisia tried hard to rebuild their spoiled government. Even though they tried to do a revolution, the government used force to block people from standing up against it. Facebook, one of the most popular SNS, was able to help Tunisia. One citizen took pictures and movies of the government's immoral behaviors and uploaded it on Facebook. Then, the resource spread online and many people over the world witnessed how the people of Tunisia lived strenuously. Furthermore, America broadcasted about Tunisia and through the attention the citizens in Tunisia obtained power. The government soon apologized and this is one of the ways the SNS brought change to the 21st century.

           Also, people can move to other countries more easily and trade with one another more easily. By this, people can save time. As the transportation is upgraded, people can move to other countries using less time than before. Nowadays, the society is called “19 hours country.” It means we can go to everywhere in less than 19 hours. Moreover, the advantage is not only for people but also for the country. Countries can trade products and goods to each country. The shorter the transaction of goods, the price becomes more affordable for the consumers. So countries can get more advantages. In the research of Global Trading Organization, it said the total money of trading cost has been decreased. Also, the usage of fuel has decreased too, so it is like killing two birds with one stone.

           In conclusion, this new century will bring the world closer. Because of enhanced technology, both SNS and transportation are further developed. They are the main reasons why the world is getting closer. They can occur globalization and this can ultimately unify the world. This is my opinion of the main changing of the twenty-first century. I hope the countries grow closer to one another so we can continually communicate and share even more.

댓글 7개:

  1. I really liked your main ideas about SNS & transportation.
    It is well organized and neat.
    Unlike other friends, specific and detailed examples of the ideas are the merit of your essay!
    I can see how you spent time searching for detailed examples.
    It would be better if you talked more about further FUTURE changes closed to the topic of this workshop.
    I really enjoyed your essay, though!:)

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  2. I really liked your main ideas about SNS & transportation.
    Your ideas are very well organized and neat.
    Unlike other friends, specific and detailed examples about your ideas are the merits of your essay.
    It would be better if you talked about more further FUTURE changes, though.
    I really enjoyed your essay!:)

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  3. I really liked your main ideas about SNS & transportation.
    Your ideas are very well organized and neat.
    Unlike other friends, specific and detailed examples about your ideas are the merits of your essay.
    It would be better if you talked about more further FUTURE changes, though.
    I really enjoyed your essay!:)

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  4. Hi Juice!
    This is John!!
    I didn't know that I would be the first one to comment on your essay..
    I see your essay is divided in to two parts. One part is about the SNS and the other is about transportation, and communication between different counteries. I think the essay is very well written but there are somethings that I want to tell you. The first thing is that your topics are the thing that exists already. So it would be better to point out things that doesn't exist now but exist in the future. And the another thing that I want to tell you is your essay seems very clean. I think if you paste some pictures it will definitly draw some attention.
    See you tomorrow :)

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  5. I totally agree with your idea. Advancement of transportation and communication technologies is commonly thought as the most important feature of 21st century. And especially, I like the point that you discussed about SNS. I also think these kinds of networks brought us some significant changes these days, and will bring more.

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  6. Hi I 'm Minseok Kim in your class, and I guess I am the first one to comment on your blog.

    To say, overall essay is well- readable, but I realized that there were some problems with selection of vocabularies and grammers. In addition, in the first paragraph, it was kind of difficult to understand the relationship between Jasmine Revolution, Tunisia and facebook. I see what you are trying to say, but if it was a bit more organized, it could have been easy to understand.


    Thank you

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  7. I read your essay very well. I think your essay will be much better if you mention about the change that will occur in the future, not now. I think you quite concentrate on the change of now 2013. How about considering of the change that will occur in the whole 21th century.
    THank you

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